哥哥,五分有点少了,加点嘛!
IfIhavealotofmoney,then.
Iwouldusethemoneyinthefollowingareas
FirstIwouldbuybooksIwanttosee,Ithinkthatknowledgeispower,Ineedtorecharge
ThesecondpointIwouldbuyabighouse,Shanghai'shousingpricesareexpensive,Iliveintheenvironmentofasmallplaceisnotgood.
Third,IpreparedforhertogivepensionsfortheelderlywhentheycanliveacomfortableIfIhavealotofmoney,IwillsharewithmyfamilyandChildrenshouldnothavetoomuchmoney,parentsshouldstrictlyadheretogoodusetheirmoneytomakemoneyandcultivatetheirindependenceandagoodhabitofthriftandeconomy.Toldthemthemoneyshouldbewellspent.
可以缩短一些不必要的段落.